This essay 5/8/15 has a total of 841 words and 4 pages.
In retrospect, the academic writing experience has been overly beneficial and contributed to my growth as a writer. My challenges have mostly been with keeping ideas consistent and making smooth transitions from one idea to the next. This flow of ideas is extremely important for effective communication in any written work. The realization of this fact led me to pay extra attention to my flow of ideas and make sure they do not contradict each other. Throughout my time in the course, I have sharpened my treat ment of ideas and limited the clouded vagueness my mind often produces while wandering from idea to idea. I take pride in the fact that I use my creativity often when writing about topics not normally bound with inventiveness. An issue I have noticed crop up from time to time is excessive wordiness and inappropriate word choice. For example, I stated that " public opinion towards the issue have shifted dramatically away from this point of view and towards supreme controversy. (AI, Page 2) " The use of the wor d ‘ supreme ' was inappropriate given the context of my statement. Additionally, the use of the word ‘ dramatically ' and additional reference phrases like " towards the issue " could have been omitted to both maintain the meaning and arrive at the point succinc tly. This literary OCD affliction of mine often clouds my judgment and produces an excess amount of verbiage, often exceeding the appropriate amount for any of my ideas. By correcting this problem, it may help me improve the flow of expression, which in tu rn will amplify the clarity of my ideas.
In previous years, my capacity for writing hit a roadblock. There was only so much taught about writing ability in secondary school. This boundary of knowledge prevented me from knowing the true format of an argume ntative paper. For instance, in high school the conventional argumentative essay consisted of an introduction with a thesis, supporting claims backed with anecdotal and factual evidence, and a conclusion that wrapped up ideas. My view of an argumentative p aper was expanded with the introduction of the Argument of Inquiry and further expanded with the culminating Final Position Paper. The introduction transformed into multiple parts, including a narrative, partition, and background information. Furthermore, elements such as confirmation and refutation blossomed from the roots of a supporting argument. The conclusion evolved from a mere summary to a pitch directed to the audience inciting real world action. My minuscule view of the world of argumentation expan ded tenfold. Writing from high school was only alike in regards to having a similar purpose for writing, which is to make a case and prove said case with evidence. My expanded knowledge on argumentative structure will be employed in future writings to enha nce the effectiveness of my messages. I still am seeking to find ways to cut down verbiage and arrive to points in succinct rather than superfluous manners.
My Final Position Paper encapsulates my biases, ideas, and opinions and masks it in an objective m anner. Initially I did not plan on inciting change in the real world, but an epiphany during the midpoint of my academic writing journey pushed me to make a difference with the paper. With this realization came substantial revisions to my work. My Argument of Inquiry had an introduction addressing violence in video games with respect to real world cases of gun violence. For example the mentioning of Sandy Hook was a fear-mongering element meant to emotionally appeal to the audience. My challenge was to shif t the audience ' s perception from video games as a negative force towards positive thinking. This challenge bothered me to the point where I verbally discussed my problem with Ms. Ba yly and peers during Final Questions Day. Through multiple opinions and adv ice, I was able to reach ideological equilibrium within my introduction. The inclusion of the statement " Guns and blood can become fairies and pixie dust " acted as a transition from the talk of murderous violence and uplifted the general mood (FPP, Pages 2 -3). The emotional appeal of negativity and shock far outweighed